Today's lessons were very helpful. I think they will dramatically improve my writing. But of course just studying the rules does not automatically bring changes.... ;P (Practice!) Well, here are my study notes.
Rule 13. Omit needless words.
the question as to whether --> whether (the question whether)
he is a man who --> he
in a hasty manner --> hastily
owing to the fact that (I use this phrase a lot!!) --> since (because) --- Oh. Revelation.
in spite of the fact that --> though (although)
call your attention to the fact that --> remind you (notify you)
the fact that he had not succeeded --> his failure
His brother, who is a member of the same firm --> His brother, a member of the same firm
Trafalgar, which was Nelson's last battle --> Trafalgar, Nelson's last battle
Rule 14. Avoid a succession of loose sentences
Rule 15. Express co-ordinate ideas in similar form
Expressions of similar content and function should be outwardly similar. The likeness of form enables the reader to recognize more readily the likeness of content and function.
Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method, while now the laboratory method is employed. --> Formerly, science was taught by the textbook method; now it is taught by the laboratory method.
It was both a long ceremony and very tedious. --> The ceremony was both long and tedious.
My objections are, first, the injustice of the measure; second, that it is unconstitutional. --> My objections are, first, that the measure is unjust; second, that it is unconstitutional.
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